I noticed that it had arrived, but I wanted to read things in chronological fashion. This was a GEM! And I'm still smiling as I read this. The visuals will remain with me all day now!
JOSH HAWLEY was STYLISH in his runner’s sweats as he OGLED RUDY GIULIANI, with a crown of dyed platinum blond hair, wearing his “Greedo from Star Wars” costume, which had JOSH absolutely hypnotized.
Rudy & Josh died clinging to one another as the boat sank. Their bodies were never recovered from the deep dark blue sea.
Perfect as is, but I also imagine this: Just before the vessel begins its plunge, three rat-like creatures jump ship and throw themselves into the sea. Appears to be Ivanka, Jared and Don Jr. A shark nicknamed Desantis gobbles them up.
great, but whatcha got against Eric? surely he can't be the sole survivor...I was looking for a good pun sorta thing using "The Expressway To Your Heart," but it sorta got away from me.
As the gorged shark Desantis sluggishly swims away a sharpshooter known by all as Chaos emerges onto the bridge of the Submarine Martin l King. One shot one Kill and the shark descends dead to Davy Jones Locker.
Oscar ahead. Best original screenplay nominee. Oscar goes TCinLA. His followers invited to Zoom Academy Awards Show get rowdy and have to be muted for a hot minute. They take to all social media forums and get rowdier. It’s a good day for historians and Democracy.
Character visualization wonderful!!! Steve Bannon-- scratching his balls regardless of what is going on around him--perfect.
In Draft #2 is there a way to incorporate the " Too Heavy Casket".......perhaps moved from NY, intended to be " buried at sea" to avoid exhumation???????
This new conspiracy by the good guys is gaining ground on social media. Great suggestion to include, Carol. Let’s hope that Ivana is safe somewhere in an urn on a mantel.
I just feel so out of my depth (as it were) that it's best I remain silent....but who's got the Clifton Webb part (I'm thinking of the early '50's Fox version)?
trump as Baron Harkonnen is a nice touch, especially the weeping pustules on his greasy face poking through the orange pancake makeup…now cue the Coast Guard and EPA to clean up the ketchup-infused toxic waste spill on the ocean surface.
Thanks. This is too hopeful. Lacks drama. Back to the writing board, TC. You can do better. Maybe a little selzer in the air and a food fight in action while the polka band plays excerpts from background music used in The Apprentice in violation of copyrights. Actually, I rather enjoy the characterizations.
Watch for the Second Draft...
I noticed that it had arrived, but I wanted to read things in chronological fashion. This was a GEM! And I'm still smiling as I read this. The visuals will remain with me all day now!
JOSH HAWLEY was STYLISH in his runner’s sweats as he OGLED RUDY GIULIANI, with a crown of dyed platinum blond hair, wearing his “Greedo from Star Wars” costume, which had JOSH absolutely hypnotized.
Rudy & Josh died clinging to one another as the boat sank. Their bodies were never recovered from the deep dark blue sea.
The two embraced for eternity.
That's the thing with screenplays - everybody thinks they're a writer. :-)
That's really quite good.
Not in your league, TC, however inspired. They are a cute couple though!
Every little bit improves the show.
Perfect as is, but I also imagine this: Just before the vessel begins its plunge, three rat-like creatures jump ship and throw themselves into the sea. Appears to be Ivanka, Jared and Don Jr. A shark nicknamed Desantis gobbles them up.
A good revised scene.
great, but whatcha got against Eric? surely he can't be the sole survivor...I was looking for a good pun sorta thing using "The Expressway To Your Heart," but it sorta got away from me.
Eric wasn’t invited on the boat.
As the gorged shark Desantis sluggishly swims away a sharpshooter known by all as Chaos emerges onto the bridge of the Submarine Martin l King. One shot one Kill and the shark descends dead to Davy Jones Locker.
CUT! That's a print!.....Perfect.....:-)
Oscar ahead. Best original screenplay nominee. Oscar goes TCinLA. His followers invited to Zoom Academy Awards Show get rowdy and have to be muted for a hot minute. They take to all social media forums and get rowdier. It’s a good day for historians and Democracy.
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I Laughed Out Loud!
LOVE it! LOVE it!!!
Character visualization wonderful!!! Steve Bannon-- scratching his balls regardless of what is going on around him--perfect.
In Draft #2 is there a way to incorporate the " Too Heavy Casket".......perhaps moved from NY, intended to be " buried at sea" to avoid exhumation???????
Please keep going.......
That is a good idea.
This new conspiracy by the good guys is gaining ground on social media. Great suggestion to include, Carol. Let’s hope that Ivana is safe somewhere in an urn on a mantel.
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Outfuckingstanding sir!
Jim Cameron would be so jealous.....
I just feel so out of my depth (as it were) that it's best I remain silent....but who's got the Clifton Webb part (I'm thinking of the early '50's Fox version)?
Brilliant! Can we get a shot of Josh Hawley running across the deck, screaming?
This was only the First Draft, not the Second Draft or the Polish. :-)
Sorry, TC didn’t mean to step on your creative process. I just got so caught up in the moment! 😘
trump as Baron Harkonnen is a nice touch, especially the weeping pustules on his greasy face poking through the orange pancake makeup…now cue the Coast Guard and EPA to clean up the ketchup-infused toxic waste spill on the ocean surface.
This is terrific. Can’t wait to see revisions and the first rushes!! Go for it!
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Thanks. This is too hopeful. Lacks drama. Back to the writing board, TC. You can do better. Maybe a little selzer in the air and a food fight in action while the polka band plays excerpts from background music used in The Apprentice in violation of copyrights. Actually, I rather enjoy the characterizations.